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Entrail
February 22nd, 2008, 03:14 PM
May as well add my character to this.

Mecha Sonic MS-0023 "Entrail"

Alias: The Entrail, Blue Bastard, 'Him'

Age: 900+ (So he states)

Height: 6' 5"

Weight: Close to 1 ton

Sex: Male

Blood type: N/A

Star sign: None

Species: Hybrid Reploid-RobotnikTech, demonic/Chaos elements.

Sexuality: Het.

Likes: Torment, explosions, fear, technology.

Dislikes: Deep water

Theme: 'Animal I have Become' - Three Days Grace
Fight Music: 'Spitfire 05' - Prodigy

Personality: Chaotic. Can be cold, calculating and devious one time, can be outright berserking another. Tends to use fear a lot in his attacks, but will normally go for an outright power fight. Sarcastic when speaking, talks to most like they are inferior.

Appearance: 6'5". Thin looking build. Most of his body covered in what looks like a black body suit. Head looks similar to Metal Sonic's in Sonic CD, but more streamlined. The eye does not look like any hedgehogs, like Metal's does, more like a visor, with a single dagger-shaped red eye. The face plate looks more like a mask than a muzzle. The torso armour has a cylinderical top where the neck meets the body, two large orbs where the shoulders are and a large red diamond on the chest piece. the armour ends before his waiste, with a dagger shaped point at the front and two around the back, with 4 jet thrusts coming from his back to provide flight. Blet across the waist, and a pair of metal boots, along with forearm gauntlets, both with a red diamond on them. Colour of the armour is blue, with white trim along the head spikes, in the corners of the visor, along the edges of the arm and leg armour. the feet are red. And the mouthpiece can split apart in a liquid metal style, revealing a tongue of undetermined length.

Le Images

http://www.entworks.org/art/Finished/valentine.jpg
http://www.entworks.org/art/Finished/HappyCG.png
http://www.entworks.org/art/Finished/FearColour.jpg

Biohazard
February 22nd, 2008, 08:54 PM
Not so fond of this guy, honestly.

I don't mind robot characters- I find them interesting- but what I didn't like was his likeness to Metal Sonic and you comparing your character to him. Also, the bio is pretty short and didnt really make me feel like I know much about the character. The addition of strengths and weaknesses would be a big help, and as robots dont really have a sexuality, I think it's safe to eliminated that part. Of course, I supposed there's always the possible that he was programmed to be heterosexual, in which case go ahead and keep it. I think you can get rid of the Blood Type and Star Sign though.

The character has a lot of potential. If I were you I'd work with him a bit more to further develop him, and perhaps change his design so he doesnt resemble Metal Sonic so much. If you dont mind me making a suggestion I'd maybe give him a "disguise" of sorts, like maybe the ability to change his outward appearance to something less conspicuous. After all, I'm sure the last thing he'd want is to draw attention to himself.