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supersonicfan101
February 2nd, 2008, 01:58 AM
SONIC'S TRADE (part 1)

Hey, My name is Shadow, Shadow the hedgehog. This is the year 2020. Let me bring you up too speed. It all started 30 years ago, right after we stopped the Black Arms from engulfing the planet in total darkness. Sonic, the hedgehog, decided he'd want to take one more good look inside the Ark. As you know, the Ark was the first colony to take it's research into space. The leading scientist, Professer Gerald Robotnik, grandfather of Dr.Eggman, had become so obsessed with the creation of life that he then proceeded with Project:Shadow. The project would take years to finish, but the scientist were determined to reach they're goal. All of the sudden, the military infultrated the Ark and begin killing all the scientists. Maria, Gerald's grandchild, and I tried to get away, but I'm the only one who managed.

So anyway, Sonic,Knuckles,Silver and I returned to Ark for old times sake. We browsed the halls and searched the labs. I came upon a door tha'd I never seen before on the Ark. I tried to enter the password in, but it read it as invalid. Knuckles was getting bored so he just busted the door down with those fists of his. We looked around at what seemed to be old equipment that was never used. I looked at the tubes which contained failed expierements from long time pasts. I came upon a tube which contained an actual living organism. I grabbed the tube and told the others that we were leaving. "Ahhhh,C'mon Shadow", Sonic said "Dont you want to see the control room?" "I'd think it would be easier for me if we left right now", I proclaimed. "Alright", Sonic moaned, "Let's Go." As we exited, a green liquid began to follow us to the ship. It hid in the cargo bay as we headed for Earth. When we got back, I immediatly dissapeared from the crowd. I sit down and rethink about my past. As I looked at my shoe, I noticed a green ooze attached to it. "What is this I wonder?" I decided to check on the others...

(to be continued):cool:

Ziggy
February 2nd, 2008, 09:08 AM
This is a bit to short, And I doubt that Shadow would Just start talking out of the blue.
This needs a bit more work.

Day
February 2nd, 2008, 10:42 AM
Wow.

You completely fucked up how Shadow would act.

"o hay guiz les al go on a avenchur 2gefor itl be FUN!!11!1!1!!!!!! ^_____^__^_^^^^______^"

lol, pass, and like, you used, I dunno, too many, um, commas? Like, every other, hah, every other word, had, one of those, uh, what're they called, oh, yeah, commas after it.

And it's boring. I could care less about snot in a tube. I can buy that from a dollar store, and it makes noises as well.

supersonicfan101
February 2nd, 2008, 01:25 PM
Thank you Ziggy, and Minty I have nothing to say to you .

Black Knight
February 2nd, 2008, 10:22 PM
....I seriously don't see the plot in this...and it's boring and over used.

You need to improve your grammar and get a decent story to this. And actually stick to the characters' personalities.