Elements of Power

[Shackel11]

Elements of Power
Chapter 1
Intro



Once there was a Dark Master,the Dark Masters were some of the most ruthless people in the negative galaxy.He was the lowest rank there,the butler.The butler was subject to slavery and many pranks.But soon the butler saw one of the Dark Masters telling another one that one of the Negas,an powerful force of unknown orgins,negative of the Elementals,the law of the positive galaxy was captured and thrown into the negative galaxy.this paticular Nega,named Nega after his planet which was destroyed was traveling the galaxy,looking for a way back out.After hearing this,he figured out that there was a portal back and decided to bring him there.He learned moves forbidden even to other Dark Masters.He soon figured out why.The evil spells changed his plans.He went to the leader,killing anyone who got in his way.He assainated the leader and commanded the rest to find Nega.3 months past and one person came back.
"Where are the rest of my troops!"The leader,now called Zion yelled out,only getting a small feeble mumble in reply.
"Well!"He asked again.slamming the desk in front of him.
"He's too powerful,he wiped us all out.He didn't let one of them get close."The Dark Master said,kneeling down in respect before feeling a large pain in his back and falling to the ground.
"Weaklings.I have to do this myself."Zion thought,jumping from his chair to the hallway and walking to the hangar.He picked a random ship.It was gold with a pick axe looking body.He smirked and flew off into the night.

[Sonikku]

It's very cool, but what does it have do to with Sonic? :P

[Fluffy]

I like it, but why is it Chapter 1? Would'nt it be called Intro? :p

[Shackel11]

A small space shuttle rocketed towards a large dome with a intimidating,red,swirling portal looming behind it.
"Must we come here.Not one person has ever made it out of here since we found this negative universe 1000 years ago.It has to be some kind of prank."

Name:Elemental

Age:11

Clothes:White shirt and white shorts

Hair:Black hair sticking up 10 inches but still gets in his face.

Eye Color:green

Abilities:Wind blast,wind kick,thunder wave.

Weapon of choice:Elemental Sword(large green sword with an arrow like tip.)

Height:4"6

"Yes,we'll never know until we get there."

Name:Espilon

Age:32

Clothes:Black shirt and jeans

Hair:Same as Elemental's

Eye color:yellow

Abilities:Too many to list.

Weapon of choice:Elemental staff(blue staff with golden edges)

Height:6''6

"Fine.But let's make it quick.I want to get back home."Elemental whined as they landed inside the dome.
"The door,it's melded shut."Elemental said,feeling the hardened melted metal holding the door shut as Esplion took out his staff.and a flame agnited at the tip.He continusly sliced at the door.To the naked eye at did nothing but he soon turned around to Elemental.
"I think it is time to use your moves on the door."He said.
"But I'm not good at it."Elemental complained.
"Don't worry,what's the worst you can do."Espilon said,giving him a sliver of hope.Elemental started summoning wind in his palm and started compressing it into a ball.He threw the ball of wind at the door,making a dent then spinning wind around him which he used to kick the door,making the dent way bigger than before and finishing it off with a large jolt of energy around him,blowing the door down.with the metal slowly melting on it.Espilon walked over to it.
"Nice job."He finally said,making Elemental smile but not for long as he saw another,long silver haired kid lieing on on the ground,bruised and cut up.Elemental quickly ran to the other kid's side.
"Are you okay?"Elemental said,poking the kid before a lightning bolt shot straight past him,burning some of his hair.The boy flipped and drop kicked him.Espilon fired a water beam as the boy blocked it with a lightning shield,smirking.The boy threw a large rock,causing Elemental to knock the rock back,smashing the dome above them.The boy looked up and spoke one word.
"Nega."Elemental and Espilon ran quickly out,putting a air shield around them they jumped in the ship and flew off,watching the dome fall apart and a small glint of light before the whole thing was just pieces of metal and glass floating in the air that were sucked up by the Nega Portal which caused lightning to strike multiple times inside the portal and it started to grow.
"Aw man,if the Nega portal grows too large,it'll absorb the entire universe,turning it into a parallel negative universe,inable to fend off against the nega universe.The universe is doomed."Espilon explained.
"Maybe Hiro can help.He is a scientist specialized in elemental abilities."Elemental said hopefully,looking out the window at the blood red portal growing and burning.
"But there might be a problem,remember,it's filled with volcanos,lava rivers,and sand polar zones!Polar zones made of sand!Sand!That's not right man!"Esplion panicked,mostly because he hates the heat and is scared of the sand worms.
"Why?Oh yeah,you're scared of sand worms!"Elemental teased,getting a glare in return,wiping the large grin once plastered on his face.Soon they neared the planet.It was covered in lava with small volcanoes with lava rivers covering it.It had steam and smoke covering the whole planet,making more the half of the surface invisible.Their ship plunged into the steam and smoke,stopping at a large city bursting with life with a shield on it that looked like glass and a large ring above it,large enough to ft hundreds of people.
"I'll never get over how cool that place is."Elemental said as Esplion inserted a card into a slit on the ship,causing a a small wave to go out,opening a hole to a parking lot.Elemental walked around,looking at a large square building.
"This place looks just like the old factory,just bigger.These people build fast."Elemental said,looking up as Esplion knocked on the door and a small slit opened with eyes peeking out.
"What is the planet's secret name."It asked as Esplion swiftly looked around.
"Fir-"Esplion was cut off again by the person looking through the slit in the door.
"In Rifel."It said,talking about it's native language.The native language used by Elves,Irifians,and since it is a long dead language in the world of fire,it is only used as a secret language in the Fire Army.Esplion sighed.
"Erifo."Esplion said as the slit closed and the door opened.

Name:Hiro

Age:No one will ever know.

Clothes:White labcoat,black shoes,big dark red hat,and black and blue goggles.

Height:3"2

Species:Elf

Hair:Messy hair,it sticks out of his hat a lot.

Eye color:Golden

Abilities:Scientific moves,many fire abilities.

Weapon of Choice:Large spiky hammer.
"We've got some bad news."Elemental announced,walking in.
"I know.You destroyed the dome stopping the universe from being destroyed!I'm going to have to make in invention to keep it in place.Maybe a space crumpler missle.Or maybe even just a bigger dome,even a time cont-"
"Slow down!"Espilon inturrupted."For now,what new inventions do you have?"He asked.
"Oh!I found an ancient stone from long ago!Something called an Elemental Stone.A stone of great power that could power this city for all of of enternity!It can power your fire attacks up by a lot,but I left it in the basement,a few floors above the steam machine,something that condenses steam so our city can have water."Hiro said,pointing to a hole with a ladder going down to the basement.

There ya go.The unedited version of my story,chapter 2 anyway.

[Espio]

Ya know when I first read the "intro" I was begining to think you were talking about Eggman Nega.....

[Alex Kaisentrifel]

Ah, it's okay, but it can be better.

Please don't jumble everything up, it makes it sort of hard to read, and it made me lose a little interest in reading it. Add spaces in between quotes and transitions and such, if you can.

It looks okay I guess, keep at it