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Steel Valor
November 7th, 2007, 09:56 PM
Well lets see here...I thought it was high time to try my hand at fan fics. Thus, I'll try to write short stories about SteelFists, Shotgun and Bazooka, first before I get into epics. I'm not that good so bear with me okies? But I need constructive criticism people so don't hesitate to throw stuff at me *gets a shield*

Ok...well here is my first one.


Situation:

SteelFists, Shotgun and Bazooka have just retreated from a failed mission. With their brotherhood and trust in shambles each ferret struggles to try and reconciliate themselves. In this short story we will look at a side of SteelFists that has never been seen before. Well moving on to the Story... *crosses fingers*







Brothers in Arms

“Where’s Steel?” Shotgun looked around the deserted domicile. The place had become eerie and somewhat gloomy. The floorboards creaked when they were stepped on. The various door hinges squeaked when the doors were opened. Everyday seemed like an endless night. It would was a gothic paradise so to speak.

The young man’s mismatched eyes zoomed this and that, scanning the room for someone. The left eye was blue the other was yellow. In the dim light Shotgun was tall and slim, but well built. He carried a reckless smile wherever he went. This of course, would mean he was unmistakably unpredictable. He would always don a blue jacket without a shirt which would expose his muscular abdomen. Due to his bizarre likings, he chose black 70’s American pants as his choice to cover his lower part of his body. The ferret was around the age of 19 and was the second brother of a trio of fighters. He had earned himself a nickname as the Fire Extinguisher in underworld crime. He and his brothers would always bust out those who have wronged the law. It was something they lived by.

“He said he was going to the church down on Johnny Avenue.” A younger voice replied, another ferret risen up from a stack of books close by. It was Bazooka, the youngest brother of the so called “Ferret Trio”. The 16-year- old ferret came out without a shirt. He resembled somewhat like Shotgun but with quite a few changes. The first were his eyes, those sad yet simple eyes. For someone so young, it had looked he carried the weight of the world on his shoulders. Though his face was much cleaner than that of his older siblings, it would seem like he was virtually older than both of them. The young one sat down in the nearest chair next to him and took a deep breath then sighed sadly. “He seemed really troubled”

“Man that guy always has problems. He don’t know how to cope with them. He always thinks he’s alone. He’s so stupid sometimes. Man if I was back there, I’d bust out instead of fighting.” Shotgun whined.

“Shotgun stopped that. He tried….he tried his best.” Bazooka choked.

“His best wasn’t good enough. I’ve could’ve done better! What did he do? He had to stay focused on fighting. He’s like that man! When are you gonna learn that what Steel does is utter stupidity! He sucks as a leader!” Shotgun’s voice began to climb in volume.

“You weren’t in his position! You didn’t know what was happening! How could you even say that?” Bazooka stood up.

“You’re always on his side DAMMIT! You’ve got to see that he’s steering us the wrong way. Don’t you understand! It was his fault that we got captured in the first place. Just li-” Shotgun stands up also but then is cut off.

“I will stay with Steel cause he’s my older brother! He never left us! He’s always stayed by our side! I know he made a mistake. But we’re only living beings it’s in our nature to make mistakes! So what if he did make one? At least he made up for it. Better yet he even learned from it. That’s what saved us!” Bazooka started to look outraged.

“Man! FUCK THIS!!!” Shotgun roared as he grabbed a nearby table and hurled it at Bazooka. Bazooka narrowly dodged it and looked in shock at his brother at what he done.

“So…is that how it is?” Bazooka dropped his head in disappointment.

“Zooks…I didn’t- I didn’t mean to. I was just. OH GOD DAMNIT!” Shotgun cries and busts out the door. Bazooka made no attempt to stop him; he simply sat back down and let the tears run down his face quietly.

Damnit! What the fuck did I just do? Why? I didn’t mean to! Shotgun thought as he ran. He kept running. That was all he could do, he had done the worst thing he thought possible: an attempt to strike down his own brother. After that stunt how could he face Bazooka, a brother who was always kind to him, unlike their oldest brother SteelFists? Steel was always too cold. He only believed in strength and justice. He was never there whenever they need him. He would always come at the last second. Shotgun knew SteelFists hated him, he felt that SteelFists repressed him. It was like that since he could remember.

While racing, something caught Shotgun’s eye, the church that SteelFists was supposedly to be in, and he hadn’t realized he had been racing down Johnny Avenue. Maybe I should see Steel. Maybe…he could…oh who am I kidding? He thought. He was about to leave but his curiosity stopped him. The church was empty and there was only one person inside, naturally another one would feel the same. The troubled ferret peered in. There, kneeling down by the altar close to the cross of Jesus Christ was a large and bulky ferret with both hands joined together.

The bulky ferret was very tall. He wore a red jacket and black pants. His exposed abdomen was covered in numerous scars. But his face was the most distinguished of features. His left eye was red and his right was green. A vertical slash scar was vivid and stretched from the tip of his forehead down to the end of his cheek. A cross scar was had taken a position on his right cheek. His hair was untamed, wild and spiky. If you looked at him from the ceiling his hair would’ve looked like a giant X. However, this did not bother him he would continue his unusual mannerisms despite what his brothers thought. He was silently muttering to himself. It was then Shotgun noticed that he was praying.

Some time passed after he finished. Steel took out his most prized possession: A King James Version of the Bible that was given to him as a gift by someone he once loved. He rubbed the golden letters across the book cover and stared at the painted depiction of Jesus Christ. Somehow just doing that would always put him at ease. That collection of text was the only thing that could keep him sane. “The lord is my Shepherd I shall not want-”

Shotgun shook his head. Typical, every time he goes to church he’s always gots to read Psalm 23. Much to his dismay, SteelFists suddenly threw down the book and stood up abruptly and roared at the top of his lungs. “What do you want from me? What? What have I done to deserve this? I never wanted this to happen!”

“Why!?! Why do I fight? I’ve done it since I was created! I want to stop! But I keep getting pushed to keep fighting! Because of my reluctance to fight my brothers were almost killed! They’re all I have! So why must I fight so hard to keep them? Isn’t there another way? You told me to love my enemy and embrace him. But why does he refuse to allow me to do so?” The ferret paced up and down the aisles between the various benches. It was obvious he did not notice a curious Shotgun.

Whoah…This is another side Steel I’ve never seen before. A more kinda gay side! I mean come on! Love your enemy. WHACKO!!! Shotgun quietly chuckled too himself at the risk of being discovered. SteelFists went on to bellow. “What’s the point if we bring BlackWater down? There will still be evil to inhabit the world. As I long as I have lived I have never been able to smile once. I thought you were there to guide me! I thought you would be there to answer my prayers and to watch over my brothers. My brothers! There the last things that matter to me in this world. But they hate me! I screwed up because I wasn’t strong enough to protect them. And now they hate me!”

A long pause filled the silent air of the church. “But…but…I could never hate them back. They are precious to me, like diamonds. I come to you father because I’m scared. For once in my life I’m scared. No, I was always scared. I thought that if I acted the way I am; cold, hard, and tough they would have the strength to move on. But in the end all I did was scar them and burden them even more. Please…please almighty father I beg of you. Watch over them, I don’t care if you watch over me but please watch over them. I’m not strong enough to lose them. Without them…I would be lost. My days would become meaningless. My brothers are everything to me, before I met Elaina, before I met Dr. Ryuusushi, I thought my life was meaningless…”

“I only ask one thing from you Lord. Give me the strength to fight again. Give me the vigor to push on forward into life. I know I’m weak, I know I need to get strong but… I know I have sinned heavily in the past but I ask for you mercy and forgiveness and to allow me to once again press on forward!” Shotgun was stunned. This was not the brother he knew. Was it a trick to say I’m sorry to him? Did he find out that he was in the church? He couldn’t help but gaze at the ferret whom he never called ‘brother’.


SteelFists sighed and half-choked then resumed going back to his seat and recover his Bible, flipping through various pages. Shotgun smiled to himself, and paced forth over to him. “Damn, and here I was thinking that you were just a stone cold bitch who had nothing to lose and always tried to behave like a badass. How ironic that the Muscle bound King David is just a kid at heart. Why do you keep these things to yourself?”

“I feared that they would prevent us from moving forward. How long were you there? Are you…crying?” Steel paused.

“What? Oh, forget these. Look, man I’m…I’m…sorry. I thought you just hated us. I thought you wanted…you wanted to be with Elaina again.” Shotgun wiped his eyes.

“True, not a day goes by that I miss Elaina. But my brothers are more important to me than she is. I never hated you, I just wanted the best for you. I realized that all I ever did was pushing you to do something that you never wanted to do.” Steel begins to look somewhat repentant. “I hope both of you can forgive me…”

“Sheesh! What’s wrong with you? You try to hard to act like a badass stop it!” Shotgun recovers his trademark reckless smile and reaches out to his oldest brother. He now has gained a new respect for him. “Come on, lets just go home…”

SteelFists collapsed into silent tears. “I’m blessed to have brothers such as both of you. Thank you.”

“Yeah yeah! You missed Cinco De Mayo and now you’re all sad! Just get your sissy ass up and lets get moving!” Shotgun yelled who was already halfway down the aisle...

AnnZie
November 8th, 2007, 06:11 PM
^^ The first chapter is already so good. I bet the second will be great. I like how you described they're characters through speech.

Shotgun da ferret
November 8th, 2007, 07:16 PM
What the heck is the title supposed to mean??? Is it in spanish? Oh and BTW I guess you really do know me inside and out. My last line was golden! Keep em coming SteelSkull!

Steel Valor
November 8th, 2007, 08:05 PM
Still working on it but thanks I knew I'd suck. The title is actually Italien. I'm surprised that you don't know that considering that WE ARE ITALIEN! It just means A Collection of Stories.

eggman
November 9th, 2007, 03:07 PM
that a nice cat

AnnZie
November 9th, 2007, 05:27 PM
What the heck is the title supposed to mean??? Is it in spanish? Oh and BTW I guess you really do know me inside and out. My last line was golden! Keep em coming SteelSkull!

XD... lol Shots even I worked out it was Italian!

Shackel11
November 9th, 2007, 05:42 PM
If you ask me it looks spanish. Besides that, very good fan fic! |D

AnnZie
November 9th, 2007, 05:57 PM
If you ask me it looks spanish XDDD

Shacks! Comment on the fanfic first, not the name! or it'll be a spam ._.

Steel Valor
November 9th, 2007, 07:06 PM
Ok guys just a quick update...


Situation:

In an effort to get stronger SteelFists has gone on a quest to seek out the legendary Knuckles the Echinda. The ferret trio head to the spirit realm where the find the Red Echidna enjoying the after life. After relating their plight, Knuckles agrees to train them on one condition. SteelFists must fight Knuckles in a one on one Boxing Match against him and must last 15 rounds. If he can do that, Knuckles will take them in as disciples. In this short story we will look at the fight through SteelFists's point of view. I hope you all enjoy it.






SteelFists vs. Knuckles: Steel vs. Stone!!!!!




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It brought memories back to me…Dancing around the canvas, slipping jabs and straights. It all felt so good. I remember myself looking over at Knuckles, I knew I wouldn’t come out of the fight without scars, or at least a large amount of blood loss. The next thing I knew I was close face to face with the crimson echidna. The referee who was right beside us began to bark out the rules. I was so close to him I could smell his breath. The lights from the ceiling shined down upon us with blazing heat. It seems it was only yesterday, I was enrobed in red boxing trunks, red gloves, and green boots. Knuckles was obviously robed in all red.

“Ok gentlemen back to your corners.” The ref instructed.

“I’m gonna hit you so hard you grandad’s gonna feel it!” Knuckles smirked.
“It will be an honorable battle…” I simply replied. Back then in my younger years I was more serious. Much stone cold, I walked around with silent but deadly demeanor. The only ones I ever really showed weakness to was my brothers, Shotgun and Bazooka. We tapped gloves and went over to our respected corners.

“Ok, remember Steel. You can do this; you enjoy this type of shit! You’re the best! Remember, we’re right behind you!” Shotgun grinned peered from behind the ropes and he gave me a thumbs up.

“Yeah Steel! Knux is nothing; you can beat him up any day!” Bazooka encouraged me, patting me on the shoulder.

“Thanks both of you.” I said smiling back at them. Before further I could say anymore the bell had rung and the boxing fight began. I thought back to my lessons with the world’s best boxing trainer back in my days as a Perfect Soldier. Back that was long ago… Knuckles was a peculiar fighter. According to history, he was one of the ones who helped Sonic the hedgehog take down Dr. Eggman. He was like a ballet dancer in the boxing ring. At first I thought he would be fast and light. But he was slow yet graceful, what was he up to?

“Come on you gonna fight or what?” He screamed through his mouth guard.

“If you insist.” I sounded uneasy to myself. I guess I was nervous going up against a veteran fighter. One who knew how to properly fight. But I had to traverse past these excruciating thoughts and fling punches. My first few jabs had landed but as I expected, he appeared not to be bothered by it. My fists felt real good in those gloves though, that was my first mistake. I threw a couple more, they never landed. He just bobbed his head out of the way. Damn, the pain I received from the uppercut nearly knocked me off balance.

The crowd booed at me. The only voices that were with me were that of Shotgun and Bazooka’s. There was no way I could come back afterwards. Jabs and straights and more uppercuts, what was I thinking? The crowd then cried in favor Knuckles. Typical. Then I saw it: the perfect opportunity! BAM! My hook caught off surprise. Thank god it gave me some momentum. All I could remember was hooks, hooks, and more hooks. Then I heard the sweetest sound in my life: the bell.

I staggered back to my corner. “Steel! What the fuck are you doing? Get your ass back in that fight!” Shotgun spat in my face. My strength was still there, I was impressed with myself. But my mouth wouldn’t move. Bazooka simply offered me water. I took it and spat it out at the bucket he held.

“Remember Steel! You can beat him!” Bazooka said.

“Right…” My voice trailed off. The bell rang again. Funny how the bell seemed to be my savior and my curse at the same time. I took one good look at him. Those eyes he had scared me. I’ve known those eyes, the eyes of predator. Would that make me the prey? I thought it to be true. The only thing I could do for the moment was dance around wait for him, and then defend myself. It sounded like a good plan, the red echidna bouncing up and down. Then came straight at me! It was so fast-paced then. He circled around me jabbing, my head flung back and forth like a rocking chair. It didn’t hurt much, it just made me curious of what he was doing. So I came back, jab, jab, hook.

I forgot to mention that there were announcers that were narrating the fight. They spoke somewhat like monkeys. “And oh look at SteelFists coming with a combination. Look at that the crowd’s still booing at him but nevertheless he’s still going. I tell ya Steve the crowd always has an effect on the boxer.”

“That’s right Jeff. It’s a marvel how Steel is going through all this. When you look at their stats, Knuckles has much more strength than SteelFists and Knuckles has more experience and keeps a steady form at all times. A necessity when boxing. Legend has it that he once went against a god-like entity named Enerjak and won.” The other announcer commented.

Knuckles then dodged in a way I knew so well. He spun, like a top. It was something that could not be done so easily. With all of the breath he lost and the damaged he had received it would be finding your center of gravity and execute it. “You’re-you’re a practitioner of the Cyclone Step?”

I was intrigued and forgotten that I had completely lowered my guard. I couldn’t blame Knuckles for then hooking and making me fall, it was only natural. The canvas only punched me harder. Thus, the referee started to count, “1…2…3…4…”

I felt as though a ghost then helped me get up, everything just felt so light. Was it my splitting headache? I think that hook made everything all swimmy in other words, distort my vision, it was like being underwater. And so, the rounds of fighting climbed on without my noticing of it. Knuckles was beginning to look triumphant and the crowd was favoring it. I threw punches, he threw punches, but strangely I think we were enjoying it. I realized that even though we were against each other, we were still fighters who enjoyed the thrill of the game. That’s why he challenged me in the first time, he hadn’t had a good fight in a long time. The more I thought about it the more it made sense. DING-DING another bell ring.

We went back to our corners and my first question was. “What round is it?”

“Steel…forgive me but…WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU DOING???” A most unpredictable reaction erupted from Bazooka. “All I’m seeing you do is dancing around the fucking ring like a moving punching. Get your ass back in the fight and punch his lights out! Get out there and fight…him…hard!”

Shotgun was naturally excited by what Bazooka had said. “Yeah! You’re oily fast tank. You could take this guy, are just sit there and let yourself become his bitch, are you just going to stand there and let him diss you like that?”

“No, it’s just that he’s really strong. I’m not sure if I can do it. He knows the Cyclone Step” A sudden surge of encouragement came from the scowling faces of my brothers reenergized me. “OK! I’ll do it!”

“SO WHAT! THEN GET IN THERE! RUN OVER HIM! SHOW THESE PEOPLE WHO THE TRUE KING OF THE RING IS!!!” Bazooka playfully punched me in the shoulder.

“You got it!” The bell rang and I was off with new found energy. It was I who struck first. Jab, jab, jab, I was simply gauging him but at the same time pressing him. A couple more jabs came his way, I guess he must have been dazed or something because he could not keep up. Then I saw it. He was tired, he had low stamina. I already formulated a strategy in my mind and started to taunt him. “Come on what’s wrong with you my grandmother can do better.”

Knuckles had no choice but to swing hooks and jabs as he fell prey to what I had in mind. It was then that we switched roles. I had become the predator and he had become the prey. I taunted him more, but I prayed to god that he wouldn’t punch my head off. “It ain’t so bad!”

“It ain’t so bad! It ain’t so bad!” The phrase left my lips tingling everytime it left my mouth. Knuckles just grunted and punched even harder. I was sure my head would be flying off. “Come on! How’d you beat Enerjak? Tickle him to death? Man you suck!”

“RAAHH!!! You ain’t shit! I’ll kill you! I’ll kill you!” Knuckles gave a low growl and swung some more. It was obviously that I made him enraged. Pretty violent he was…

Ding-ding the bell rang. Good thing, I was starting to see elves dancing around my head and flying sailboats. When I trudged to my corner Bazooka was more enraged than Knuckles was. “STEEL! WHAT ARE YOU DOING???”

“Bazooka its all apart strategy calm down, look at him he’s getting tired.” I sat down and took a sip of water. My lungs hurt as I sucked on the straw. Ow.

“Strategy? STRATEGY!?! YOU JUST BECAME HIS PUNCHING BAG!” Shotgun hopped in.

“HEY! I don’t tell you how to fight so don’t tell me how to fight either!” I rose up and roared at Shotgun. I instantly regretted this, he was just trying to help me. “I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to, listen I know what I’m doing ok?”

“Sorry bro. Just don’t get knocked out. Just remember, after this round you only have one more round left.” Shotgun replied back with a smile.

The bell rung again, this time I was ready. Knuckles took off from his corner, panting but angry. Likewise I did too, POW! The next thing I knew I was on the ground with him screaming at me and the referee trying to hold him back. “Stay down! Just stay down mothafucka! You ain’t shit!”

“Ow…I’ll give that punch a 2 out of 10. By the way did you know that you punch like a little girl?” I smiled back, what was wrong with me? This wasn’t like me at all, maybe it was the enjoyment of the fight.

“I’LL KILL YOU!” Was the philistine’s reply pushed the ref out of the way then drived at me. If there was one thing new I learned about myself that day was that I had an innate ability to piss off someone extremely well. Knuckles was a juggernaut, he got me onto the ropes and wouldn’t stop punching. I tried blocking but there was no difference. I felt shockwaves scatter from his fists every time they landed against my flesh. I tried escaping but he caught me and threw me against the turnbuckle and punched some more. Then BOOM, his golden punch caught me square in the face and I fell again.

The referee then buzzed in and began the count. “1…2…3…4…5…6…7…8…”

I find it a miracle that I was able to get up. I told the judge to please allow me to continue because I was still ok. Not really, I was hurt in 34 different places, my fists became swollen under the gloves, I couldn’t breathe properly, and my right eye became somewhat blurry. The referee shrugged uneasily then gave us the ok to continue. I believe God smiled upon me at that moment, Knuckles was so tired that he was shuffling his feet, going slow as a slug. I seized the opportunity with great eagerness.

“HERE WE GO!” I bellowed and I threw a barrage of punches straight for him. I couldn’t stop, it was now or nothing! I had to keep going I had to keep punching, punching, punching! Jabs, hooks, straight punches, uppercuts every sort of punch I could think of! I wracked my muscles beseeching them for energy, praying that they wouldn’t falter! COME ON, PLEASE! I know I can finish this! Just a little bit MORE! Hook, jab, straight, straight, jab, jab. Knuckles was helpless and I had managed to catch him in a tight jam. The only problem was holding on to him, the more punches I throw, the more punches I had impaled him with, the more I could feel my body faltering. Shit, if only I could’ve had more stamina. Another plan: finish this all in one punch.

By this time both Knuckles and I were standing face to in the middle of the ring with the referee circling around us, prepared for the victor to emerge. There was something I hadn’t noticed: The ones who were cheering for Knuckles were now chanting my name. Why? Did my determination get to them, was it out of pity? I had no time to wonder. I had to stay focused, I reared back my left fist cradling it and focused everything I had into it. My love, my anger, my feelings, energy, emotions and my resolve was put into it. I launched. Everything went in slow motion for the next 3 movements. My powerful straight landed, Knuckles flew back, the crowd roared. But it wasn’t enough, Knuckles still stood there dazed. Bazooka cried, “Steel! Use the Erupting Uppercut!”

I nodded and resumed my stance. It wasn’t over until it was over, and I had to be the one to do it. The Erupting Uppercut was one of my signature moves but I never had the chance nor the joy of using it in an actual fight until now. Please, allow to me win! I dashed in, Knuckles threw a straight, I ducked low. My left fist touched the canvas, and then I went in. I rose up taking my fist with it, the momentum carried it and met the chin of Knuckles and went beyond it. His head flew back and his body went with it. The tower had fell. As if there wasn’t enough pandemonium, the crowd rose up to their feet and howled at me in congratulations. But it wasn’t over not just yet. The referee went over to the struggling Knuckles. “1…2…3…4…5…6…7…8…9…10! You’re out!”

“I don’t believe it SteelFists has one by TKO! This is the first time I witnessed Knuckles ever lose like this!” The announcer commented.

I leapt for joy. I have done it, I took down Knuckles one the greatest fighters ever in history. How did I do it? Bazooka and Shotgun raced into the ring to help me. They embraced me, for the first time in life, I smiled and wept tears of joy. It was an amazing sensation. Amazement, happiness, speechlessness, and love all at the same time. Shotgun’s grin was wide and he roared at me. “Steel…you did it!”

“And the winner is by Technical Knock Out, the piston-punching ferret, the muscle-bound David, the Titan of Tussle. STEEEEEELFIIIISSTSSS THE FEEEERRRREET!!!” The announcers yelled my name. However the victory was nothing to me. I went over to Knuckles who was having a conversation with the legend Sonic the Hedgehog. It had all seemed to easy, I knew it was too good to be true.

“Thank you… But next time, please don’t go easy on me” I said to him somewhat disappointed in myself. My voice sounded raspy and brittle, why? It was obvious I could never win against him, the great Knuckles the Echidna.

“You knew?” A bewildered Knuckles cocked an eyebrow. “Heh well I had to. After all I AM you’re teacher…”

AnnZie
November 9th, 2007, 09:55 PM
x3.. I love this chapter, nice to see that Steel taunted when he was still young, he always gave me the impression that he was always proper. I can't wait for more. =3

Shotgun da ferret
November 9th, 2007, 10:14 PM
“Strategy? STRATEGY!?! YOU JUST BECAME HIS PUNCHING BAG!”- My favorite line of all time. Dude, you seriously keep giving great ones man. When are you gonna make some stories of Me or Zooks. Don't take all of the spotlight.

Steel Valor
November 10th, 2007, 11:52 AM
Meh, I'm thinking stuff up as I go along. But I'm having writer's block due to my cat.

x3.. I love this chapter, nice to see that Steel taunted when he was still young, he always gave me the impression that he was always proper. I can't wait for more. =3

Thanks Ann, but Steel is typically portrayed as one of those serious and Badass cool guys. However as he progresses through life he learns to be a little more, what's the word? Laid-back and more...what's that other word? Free-spirited?

AnnZie
November 10th, 2007, 05:38 PM
Meh, I'm thinking stuff up as I go along. But I'm having writer's block due to my cat.

yea actually... I'm suffering from the same disease, therefore... I can't update on my fanfic too XD... we're about the same lol. what I do sometimes is look around for inspirations XD

Steel Valor
November 10th, 2007, 11:14 PM
Lol, this chapter was actually based off my first Boxing county-wide championships. I placed 2nd though, I might put an alternate version of the chapter BUT THATS A MAYBE.

Shotgun da ferret
November 11th, 2007, 12:04 PM
"Edumacation, learn me a book." Thats gold but back on topic. What do you mean by an alternate version. Like what are you doing to do with it?

Bazooka the Ferret
November 11th, 2007, 12:55 PM
Wow Steel, I didn't know you could write like this. Hurry up and post up another one quick!

Steel Valor
November 11th, 2007, 05:30 PM
Lol Zooks there are many things you don't know about me. Well so far I've been thinking to do the story from Knuckles point of view. Or maybe an entirely different fight story and put in the 3rd person. And thanks for the compliment.





EDIT: Update time! I actually just made this one not too long ago. Though I think it's missing something. I'm not sure what. Can someone help me out with it?



Situation:

Shotgun is at the famous restaurant Cafe de la Bonne Nourriture. He is patiently waiting for his date to arrive. This is a very special night for him because he is about to propose to her.









A young ferret sat at a table at the restaurant waiting. The night air seemed unusually crisp, busy-bodies were everywhere. Young people were enjoying themselves, and the city was buzzing with ongoers. He was enrobed in a tuxedo and was constantly twiddling his thumbs. Today was the day that he was going to propose to his one true love, Jennifer Ramos. Alright what do I say? Um…I gotta think something quick! I got it! Naw that ain’t going to work! Hey listen Jen, there’s been something I’ve been wanting ask ya. It’s… Naw that’s too corny! Shotgun tried his best to keep his cool. Even though he was very unpredictable, he had a notorious reputation to being extremely unprepared. Jennifer Ramos had everything Shotgun ever wanted from a woman, the charm, grace, beauty. She had instantly hooked him from the moment he laid eyes on her. She was the only one that could ever truly calm him down.

“Excuse me sir. Are you Mr. Shotgun by any chance?” A gentleman that carried a snobby accent who was dressed in a tuxedo similar to that of Shotgun’s addressed him.

“Yeah what if I am? What’s it to you anyways?” Shotgun slumped in his chair, trying to intimidate the man as much as possible. He had a deep hatred for those who were snobby and thought they were above everyone else.

“ My mistress, Ms. Jennifer has asked me to present this to you. I am her butler Mr. Haddlesworth. Pleased to meet you.” The gentlemen placed a small envelope on the table not far from him. “I would love to stay and chat but frankly my work won’t allow me to do so. Ta-ta.”

“Sheesh, what kind of name is Haddlesworth? And he left in a hurry, what’s wrong with him? DUMBASS!” Shotgun opened the miniscule envelope after the butler had left. In it was a small letter from Jennifer. Her handwriting was neatly printed across the fine velvet paper. “What a woman, probably an apology letter or something cause she couldn’t make it. I understand.”


It read:




Shotgun,

You must forgive me for what I’m about to say. It regards us, as in our relationship together. I’m afraid it was never meant to be…Forgive me, all our time we spent together was never meant to be. I know, I know it seems stupid but it’s true. The day I met you, you seemed like a nice guy. I couldn’t help myself but to fall in love with you. It hurts so much writing this, but I had to tell you some day. When I met you I was already engaged to someone else, please try to understand. I had a great time with you, but my heart belongs to him. But I don’t expect you to understand and I can sympathize if you hate me now. We are to be wedded tonight, and therefore I thought this was the easiest way possible. I thought it would be more painful if we saw each other. I only wish that I could’ve made this much more easier. Easier for both of us, I’m going to miss all the laughs we used to share, I’m going to miss leaning on you’re shoulder. I guess this is it, goodbye…


Forgive me


-Jennifer Diana Rose Ramos






By the time Shotgun finished reading he had a huge grin on his face. He was no longer burdened with a relationship and rose up from the table. He jumped in joy and yelled at the top of lungs. “YAHOOOOO! I’m free! I’m free. Thank God!”

The jubilant young ferret raced across to the street in to the bar parallel to the restaurant. He rushed to the bartender and screamed, “Ey! Gimme a Captian Morgan man! I’m feeling good tonight.”

The bartender followed his orders and poured a big cup of cold, fizzy beer. Shotgun happily gargled down the intoxicating liquid and ordered for more. Shotgun was in utter ecstasy, he was drunk on pleasure. He drunk and drunk till he was so intoxicated exactly 5 hours had passed. Another young ferret had entered the bar, he was identical to Shotgun, but younger. The young man searched around then found his brother. The young man was obviously Bazooka, the youngest of the Ferret Trio. He came over to Shotgun and noticed that he was drunk beyond control. His eyes have become lazy, his speech has become slurred, he can no longer balance himself.

“Shotgun, you took longer than you should have. What happened? Did she say yes.” Bazooka inquired. “Ugh, why are you drinking?”

“What the-oh…Zooks it’s you. What’s up bro, have a drink with me. The greatest thing happened to me today. Its so awesome man! Here read this.” Shotgun stumbled over to a side, struggling to give him the same letter Haddlesworth had given him.

“Oh no…Shotgun this is terrible…How could you even say that?” Bazooka quickly scanned the letter and looked at Shotgun innocently. His eyes were starting to water. Shotgun wasn’t happy, he was saddened all along.

“Whatchu talking about?” Shotgun roars in laughter. “Lemme tell you something about women Zooks…Buuuurrrrrp, they ain’t nothing but hoes and tricks. You give and give and give, you pour out you’re soul for them. And then just when you think that nothing can go wrong. But what happens? They just turn out to be two-timing whores and bitches who just want to have a good time. That’s what I love about them.”

“Shotgun…come on. Let’s go home.” Bazooka put his brother’s arm around his shoulder and carried out of the bar. He knows that his brother can take it anymore.

Shotgun felt as though as his heart has been ripped out and torn into little pieces. Even worse his stomach wasn’t feeling so good. He went over to a nearby alley and throw-up. It felt good to him; Bazooka had followed alert and ever nurturing. “Shotgun! Are you ok?”

Tears started to run down the young ferret’s face, his tuxedo became stained with the salty tears. He choked and cough furiously in them. Bazooka could just only watch and help him up. His voice was loud and hoarse with grief as he held out the ring he was going to present to Jennifer. “She was everything to me man… I thought she was different… I thought she and I had something going… She was everything. I tried so hard to give her what she wanted… I-I-I-I-I-I”

“Come on Shotgun let’s go home.” Bazooka resumed to carry his sobbing brother…