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Ronic
October 15th, 2007, 06:10 AM
Here is another one of my characters from my new fan fic series based upon my character, Ronic The Hedgehog.

http://ronic92.deviantart.com/art/Spine-the-Porcupine-65490325

Name: Spine the Porcupine
Age: 15
Species: Porupine
History:

Born on Devil Island on Counter-Mobius, Spine grew up all alone in the world, with only the Elder of the Porupines to raise him, as his parents had died trying to protect Ataxia, a being from the Master Ataxia Emerald.
When Spine was 14, the Elder, on his deathbed said:

"You must always guard the Master Ataxia Emerald. All though the Ataxia Emeralds are powerful, the Master Ataxia Emerald is more powerful then all of them combined. Soon, an evil will come to take the Master Ataxia Emerald, but the "Blue Breeze" will arrive to vanguish him, using the power of Positive Ataxia. Protect the Master Ataxia till the "Blue One" comes. This is your destiny, Your Duty"

Soon the evil did arrive, in the form of Dr Ham-Man, who used the Master Ataxia Emerald to power his giant robot. But using the Positive power of the Ataxia Emeralds, Ronic became Super Ronic and saved Counter-Mobius yet again and returned the Master Ataxia back to Devil Island. Ronic and Spine became close friends, but still have their little fights and squabbles.


The Ataxia Emeralds are 7 Emeralds of imense power. Long ago, a evil power tried to claim the power for his own, but a hero, known as the "Blue Breeze" used the positive energy of the Ataxia Emeralds and defeated the evil force. To defeat the evil, the hero sacrified himself to destroy the evil. The lifeforce of the hero became the Master Ataxia Emerald. But the hero did not die, as he was becoming the new Master Emerald, he said

"Even though I am going, I will return, but not as you know me. I will be reborn in a new born child, and as that child is born, a new evil will rise to destroy our land. But aslong as the new born sticks to the power of good, and uses the power of Ataxia for good, then the new evil will be destroyed. The servers are the 7 Ataxia. The server is the one that unifies the Ataxia"

And the prophercy did come true, as the spirit of the hero of "Blue Breeze" was reborn as Ronic The Hedgehog.

Black Knight
October 15th, 2007, 11:14 AM
It would of been a good story if it hadn't been pretty much a complete rip off of Sonic's story and Spine is basicly a copy of Knuckles.

Kid, I want to see some creativity from you, cause you ain't gonna be very liked if you just keep copying things.

Ronic
October 15th, 2007, 11:40 AM
My new fan fic, if I decide to create it, is based on a planet in another dimension called Counter-Mobius. Things arn't the opposite, whic was my first idea, where Dr Ham-Man was a good guy and Ronic and that were the bad guys, which then lead Sonic to this planet to help out.

But I thought "Well everyone likes Sonic because he's fast, and a hero" so I thought I would stick with that main story. I wanted my story to be different than the likes of Sonic, so I focused it on my main character, Ronic. I did base my characters on existing Sonic Characters, but changed their image and created storylines for them based on the Sonic Characters, but I changed them here and there. Tease are all just ideas and I am seeing how you guys liked them. I used the Sonic Character designer to give me an idea what my characters would look like, and I liked them.

So overall, I am seeing if you like my "Test-Run" Characters. I used the Sonic Character designer to see what they would look like and used the original Sonic character stories, but changed them a little.

Black Knight
October 15th, 2007, 11:53 AM
They're still rip-offs, doesn't matter how many tiny details you find that you've changed.

Ziggy
October 15th, 2007, 10:11 PM
...Devil Island=Angel Island
...counter Mobious=Mobious
...Spine=knuckles
...Atixia Emeralds=Chaos Emeralds
...Dr.Ham-Man=Dr.Eggman
...This Story=Two thumbs down
...This Story=A total Rip-off


(Black Knight how do I qualify for a job here?)

Sonic The Hedgehog
October 16th, 2007, 12:16 AM
Well I like the name "Spine the porcupine" ronic. Nice name, but maybe you should completely redo the storyline like they are saying. Keep the characters, but give them new roles.

Black Knight
October 16th, 2007, 02:23 PM
My and Deano asked Sonikku for the positions to get the floods of n00bs under control.
I don't think he's hiring more Mods at the moment, I was kinda suprised about Ann, but any more mods right now would be silly.

Ronic
October 16th, 2007, 04:06 PM
huh? what ae you talking about?

Sparky
October 16th, 2007, 05:06 PM
I agree with all of the comments said so far. These are rip-offs, and basically the only things you did here are switch a few words. One of the minor things I disliked was (mentioned on another topic) that you used a program for making Sonic Characters, not drawing and uploading. I thought that you were a great artist, and you mentioned that you lied...

Ziggy
October 16th, 2007, 06:07 PM
My and Deano asked Sonikku for the positions to get the floods of n00bs under control.
I don't think he's hiring more Mods at the moment, I was kinda suprised about Ann, but any more mods right now would be silly.

Ok...I understand.
I Realy Want to help you all out with the Noobs and all.
(Main Noobs: Oscar!2000, Darkness/Coolboy1234)

Black Knight
October 16th, 2007, 07:20 PM
huh? what ae you talking about?

I was speaking to Ziggy, answering his question about how to become a Mod.


Ok...I understand.
I Realy Want to help you all out with the Noobs and all.
(Main Noobs: Oscar!2000, Darkness/Coolboy1234)
Sorry dude, but you were one of the n00bs I signed up to kick into shape.
As you don't go on my nerves anymore it worked <3(Thats a compliment, you understood what you were doing wrong quite fast.)

Sonic The Hedgehog
October 17th, 2007, 01:47 AM
My and Deano asked Sonikku for the positions to get the floods of n00bs under control.
I don't think he's hiring more Mods at the moment, I was kinda suprised about Ann, but any more mods right now would be silly.Well I was here a while back and I was a mod as well. I've got a lot of crap going on right now back at the house and school and all, but once I get settled with my grades in all (more than likely in the next week or so) I'll be a mod again.

Black Knight
October 17th, 2007, 10:49 AM
Still say that more mods would be silly...Unless Sonikku plan to get the mod team up and going before we get any unexpected floods of n00bs and nitwits...

Well, I don't read his mind and it's all up to him in the end. =P

Ziggy
October 17th, 2007, 06:01 PM
I know, I a was noob but you have to be honest, you were a noob some time ago. I'm saying that in the nicest way I can.

Black Knight
October 17th, 2007, 07:32 PM
Oh, yeah, I was a n00b once, when I first got onto the net, which was years ago.

Sparky
October 17th, 2007, 08:05 PM
Am I a noob? I try to be as un-noobly-like as I can... what are some things I can improve?
This is really none of my business. You don't have to reply if you don't want...

Black Knight
October 17th, 2007, 08:13 PM
N00bs pointless posts, spam, can't spell for shit and have horrible grammer, usually suck at rping because they god mode among other things.
N00bs are just generally annoying.
Unless you fit this description, no you're not a n00b.

From what I've seen you're not one.

Ziggy
October 18th, 2007, 11:02 PM
No your not a NOOB Sparky.
Well.....To me your not, you actually did better than I did.
But then again, you could've been doing this for years.
Sparky=No Noob
Ziggy=No noob(not any more)
Black Knight=super non Noob