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E-123 Omega
April 30th, 2008, 06:27 PM
I know on my last character I lacked on the creativity part but this time I think I got a better character. Please review!

Name:Unknown

Code Name:Toro

Species:Minotaur

Age:He himself is in his mid twenties but his enicial birth was nearly 2300 ago

Birth place:Government research center/cloning department

Gender:Male

Size:8'4"

Appearance: Toro appears to be a bull walking upright but his front limbs are two powerful arms that can lift large amounts of wait, he also has a pair of shiny black horns, Toro's legs are are the most bull like other than his head because of their bent back position and hooves, and his body is covered in deep brown fur.

Attire:The real piece of clothing that Toro has is a pair of green sweat pants. But what he lacks in clothing he has gold bands. These bands were found in the same cave that his remains were found and he considers them sacred. These include a nose ring, a arm band, and a smaller band that goes around his right horn.

Goals:To change the image that the Myth of Theseus and the Minotaur has cursed him with(that he is a heartless man eating monster)

Likes: Anything that can challenge his own strength

Dislikes: People's images of a Minotaur

Fears:The cracks of whips(scientist say that it may have to do with his past life)

Life:Toro thinks he has a good understanding of life thinking that you should cherish every moment you have and not to take life unless necessary

Death:That you shouldn't fear it or love it, just live with it. And if someone does die you shouldn't mourn openly but rather subtly.

Friends: Anyone willing to help the oppress and suffering

Rivals: If you can lift a lot inspect him there

Enemies: Those who think they can do what they want to people without consequences

Attitudes toward(s):

Money/power: "The more you have the more clouded your vision is"

Fighting: "As long as I'm not angry you'll 'most likely' live"

Anger: "It's a little more complicated with me"

Powers:Other than his natural strength he has a phase known as "Enraged Bull" a uncontrollable surge of rage that causes Toro to go berserk which can be caused by someone who gets him angry or by strange flash backs from possibly his past. This phase increases the amount of strength can use but also clouds his judgement of who is enemy and friend.

Combat: If he can throw his fist or charge with his horns he's good

Strengths: If your slow and he can hit you, you're as good as dead

Weaknesses:What Toro has in strength he loses in speed. Meaning if your more evasive than others you are pretty safe

Toro is said to be the great Minotaur of myth after his remains are found in a maze like cavern in the country on Greece along with his golden bands and small sample of brown hair. After cleaning and purifying the sample of hair, scientist found that the DNA had high amounts of a radiation that could only be projected from the Chaos Emeralds. This brought up the question whether ancient cultures could also use the power of the Chaos Emeralds. But that was a question to solve another day, as the main issue is to find out what the specimen looked like so they cloned a living organism fro the hair code naming it: Toro.
When Toro was "born" he had chronic night terrors and preformed random acts of violence brought upon by flashbacks of him chained to a wall, starving and being whipped. Government psychologist say that it may have to do with the theory of genetic memory and Toro is having flashbacks of his past life. Which could explain the myth as well for maybe he was so desperate for food he would kill what ever was in the caverns, in this case ancient Greeks.
So tired of the constant test and studies Toro breaks out, wanting to see how the world has change and to clear his name of being a monster. And while doing this he must avoid being re-captured and sent back. Not until he completed his goal. To this very day he's being chased by the military, government, and any known authority.

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Well that's it. Please comment any suggestions.

Steel Valor
April 30th, 2008, 09:08 PM
It's good to see you're trying hard to come up with a fanchar that suits you. But in the Fan Character Ghospel according to Jaicei:



Don't make them related to official characters. It's considered unoriginal in most fandoms.



G.U.N. would qualify as official. Nuff said. BTW, you still are working on the history correct? Because what you have now seems a bit too miniscule.

Ross LionHeart
April 30th, 2008, 10:28 PM
I really gotta say that you are getting there, it looks like a large improvement from the last profile.

However I do have to say that the history could be improved, both with more information and adding paragraphs. A reasonable paragraph length is about five to seven medium sized sentence.

Age:He himself is in his mid 20's but his enicial birth was nearly 2300 ago


upright but his front limbs are 2 powerful arms that can lift large amounts of wait

Another thing too is with those numbers it's best if you were to spell out the number, instead of having the actual numeral.

Hope the tips help!

E-123 Omega
April 30th, 2008, 11:02 PM
Thanks guys! I'll try adding more to the story but right now I'm out of ideas. Please more suggestions!